Well Animated and well thought out
Except the whole "fast food empire greedy corperations out to get you MCEVIL!" bit, just made you sound pretentious and and annoying.
I enjoyed it though, i'll overlook the fact that he had a real loaded gun, perhaps he was just dimwitted?
(the elevator scene was the best)
p.s. If you are going to voice act and don't have a versatile voice perhaps you should get some of your 'mates' to help you